It was the realization of the moment
the irony of the scene,
I was the teacher
She was the student,
Change was near
The sound of roaring lions…
vs. the presence of an anaconda
filled the air with an outspoken silence,
Change has spoken
I wait,
Patiently with the vengeance of a
tortured soul and a weary heart,
Running, running, running…
Change chases me
I stand,
Using the strength of the anaconda,
The weapons of the tortured soul
and the troubles of the weary heart…
I allow change
12 comments:
I like how you used good descriptive words in your poem, and how you kept repeating change throughout the poem. good job
hey... i like you poem!! it is really good... i like how you use your descriptive words...i wish that i could write like you... i try to be better you know...(hahaha j/p) but i think that it is really good....
love your poem like the way it appear and sound.
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this it a good poem about a change in roles. good job!
Thats a good poem to describe change. I really like the way you use the Anaconda as symbolism. Its a great poem I like it
good metaphors, i like how you ran away from change at the beginning and then accepted it.
Girl i like how you use words that people don't think it will come to mine, your ideas are great,I love it great job.
Dang girl! keep it up you can write good! You use really good descriptive word. I also like your I dream poem it's true but not going to happen!
I like how you used the word "change" in different ways.
Also, even though it may be a sort of weak compliment, I like the title. It makes you want to read the poem. Like if this was ever in a poetry book, I'd definitely read it just by looking at the title.
I like the way you used the two animals to describe different feelings. That itself gives meaning to what you're trying to say.
Great job.
love your poem you show good descriptive words. you are good at writing keep it up! I really like your other poem ''dream'' it's really good but not going to happen J/K.
This poem is great. My favorite part is where you are vs. the sound of a lions roar to a presence of anaconda. You use your words so well that i get what you mean. How you allow to change with your strength, soul, and your heart.
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